Parts tense, gardenia droner is sad
A cicada’s siren, ordained, rages
The first time I heard a cicada was in a Tokyo street at night, and I honestly thought it was a security alarm, such was the intensity of its siren.
With haiku, the 5-7-5 syllable count is only really relevant in Japanese, in which it is as natural a rhythm as iambic pentameter is in English.
Here’s a 5-7-5 palindromic haiku I made up just now (original palindrome was first and last line, which I expanded by adding the middle line). If you quibble over “a Orc”, well then it will eat you next!
Star, Evil Swan, Gnome
Dwarf lets a Orc roast Elf; raw
Demon gnaws live rats
I noticed the darkly delicious title of your blog and thought this would be as good a place to post it (first ever) as any …